business reporting model

business reporting model
I wrote a letter is it ok?

Games Design Studio letter Hi, I am currently doing a course in game design in college and I have to write a report on the gaming industry that includes finance and market trends. I need some basic information on costs, turnover and profits available to your company in the development, publication and distribution of a title. This including: • market trends • Business models • The budget systems • Financial Responsibilities • Preparing a budget • Performance evaluation periods against budgets • • budgeting, management and reporting • Break Even Analysis • Financing • Groups • Milestones • Franchise Licensors It would also be helpful if you could send me financial report. I would appreciate any help you can give me. Thank you, Chris Barnes.

Here is the link to write a Business Letter: http://www.cyberbee.com/science/letpart.html Pay Special Attention to the "parts" of a business letter. Except that, in line title, I would draw the letter L in (if that is really your subject line, that is). I would also like to put space between hello and body literally. Let me replace 'hello' with something more business-like, such as Dear ________, or even "To Whom It May". Instead "I do" a course, perhaps "a course" would be more correct. The word "this" in the phrase "this should include financial ….', be replaced by "who", as in that includes financial ….'. I would like to clarify the college you attend, giving more credibility your questions. In the first line of the second paragraph, I would use another word "available" or expression differs from the provision of your company. Or break the sentence. It seems that you are wondering what costs are available, revenues are available, and what profits are available. I know what you say, but it may not be correctly interpreted when they are written this way. Maybe insert the word "also" between "and" and "profits". I am not sure of the spelling of analysis in the number 9 on your list. Hope this helps.

Mark Leibovit’s Nightly Business Report interview April 18, 2008